To be honest? Your Joshua seems pretty flat. He does not feel like Joshua, nor act like Joshua should. I've taken a look at your personality section and it seems really weak, as if you've only got the basics down. There is much more to read into if you pay close enough attention.
First of all, your Joshua is childish and petty and while he does act like a total brat in the canon, you're just not portraying that in the right way. Joshua is a pest. He pesters people, slowly wearing down their patience until he becomes unbearable. He does this frequently during week 2, from the moment they meet until day 7. Also, he does not giggle enough or carry that irritating tone as I read these tags. If he's being snarky, he needs to sound snarky. If he's pissed, he should be cold and aloof.
Joshua as Composer can best be compared to Old Testament God. He is compassionate and loving, however wrathful when he deems necessary. He is willing to listen to reason. On the inside, deeeep deeeeeep on the inside, Joshua IS loving and compassionate. He tries to hide it due to some insecurities, but he really does love mankind. Though it doesn't seem like it, he does give the Players advantages, by partnering them up and not allowing the Reapers to directly attack them until the 7th day. So he really does care. But, like Old Testiment God, he doesn't see anything coming out of Shibuya. There's a lot of potential, but people are wasting it. So he wants to stop the "disease" before it spreads. He's actually thinking about the world as a whole instead of Shibuya.
He is, if I'm not mistaken, post-game, in which he has had a change of heart. I don't know if you've seen the secret ending or read the secret or not, but if you have, you would know that Joshua doesn't really hold a grudge against Hanekoma for his actions. They are depicted together sitting atop a building, on talking terms. Joshua knows that it was for the good of Shibuya, even if his means of attempting to save it were a bit unorthodox. The means in which your Joshua has handled finding out such information has obviously not been such. And again, he has been very childish about it, if not outright cruel.
These are just a few major things I've noticed. You can take this crit as you wish, but I do hope I haven't insulted you and you will take what I've said into consideration. Thank you so much for your time.
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First of all, your Joshua is childish and petty and while he does act like a total brat in the canon, you're just not portraying that in the right way. Joshua is a pest. He pesters people, slowly wearing down their patience until he becomes unbearable. He does this frequently during week 2, from the moment they meet until day 7. Also, he does not giggle enough or carry that irritating tone as I read these tags. If he's being snarky, he needs to sound snarky. If he's pissed, he should be cold and aloof.
Joshua as Composer can best be compared to Old Testament God. He is compassionate and loving, however wrathful when he deems necessary. He is willing to listen to reason. On the inside, deeeep deeeeeep on the inside, Joshua IS loving and compassionate. He tries to hide it due to some insecurities, but he really does love mankind. Though it doesn't seem like it, he does give the Players advantages, by partnering them up and not allowing the Reapers to directly attack them until the 7th day. So he really does care. But, like Old Testiment God, he doesn't see anything coming out of Shibuya. There's a lot of potential, but people are wasting it. So he wants to stop the "disease" before it spreads. He's actually thinking about the world as a whole instead of Shibuya.
He is, if I'm not mistaken, post-game, in which he has had a change of heart. I don't know if you've seen the secret ending or read the secret or not, but if you have, you would know that Joshua doesn't really hold a grudge against Hanekoma for his actions. They are depicted together sitting atop a building, on talking terms. Joshua knows that it was for the good of Shibuya, even if his means of attempting to save it were a bit unorthodox. The means in which your Joshua has handled finding out such information has obviously not been such. And again, he has been very childish about it, if not outright cruel.
These are just a few major things I've noticed. You can take this crit as you wish, but I do hope I haven't insulted you and you will take what I've said into consideration. Thank you so much for your time.