How's My Driving?

[neverplaysfair]

How's My Driving?

What do you think about how I play Joshua? Things you like, things you hate, things to improve on? Please give me a little more to work off of than "You suck, go die in a fire" as that tends not to help me actually improve my playing.

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I'm so sorry for spamming your crit page. Original anon.

[(Anonymous)]

First I want to thank you so much for reading all this. I am admittedly terrible at writing critique, so this was me trying to get
everything out. Also, I'm really sorry if I came off terribly brash or rude, because my intention wasn't to cause harm. Really.

I honestly did not mean for the old testament thing to be as much as a "this is right and you're wrong" as it did (it's why I shouldn't write things at some ungodly hour). I didn't realize it seemed so this is the only way until after I had posted it, which was too late. Though I myself am not as much into the Scriptures, I grew up listening to said stories and so they are much more prominent in my mind. It is an interpretation, and potentially something to base ideas off of because of all the religious subtext in the game. Even the architecture has religious subtext, with numerous crosses scattered throughout. So again, sorry for being so "this is the only way", because it's not, just the most prominent from my perspective.

With the articulation on his actions towards Hanekoma, it makes more sense, however, still feels somewhat off in my opinion. Canon review might possibly be helpful for that? And I've already stated above that I didn't really think about the secret ending in regards to that much when I wrote that, so just kind of ignore that. I'm sorry.

As for the pestering, he does have a greater meaning behind it with Neku. However, he could possibly do the same with those who interest (or irritate) him. He really is a troll, when he wants to be. You could try having him outwardly act as if nothing had happened, or perhaps take out his frustrations with Hanekoma by being an absolute pest to others? Maybe? It's just an idea?

As for the canon review, that would probably help a lot. I know it has for me when I've been in a similar situation. I don't know if it's any help, but there is a game script on gameFAQS and there are playthroughs on youtube if you don't have time to play through the game yourself or just need a quick refresher.

Really, it's just that I blink and suddenly WALL OF TEXT FWOOM

[neverplaysfair]

I try to make him do it with everyone, it just comes across better sometimes with some than others. In the game, he does it with Ken Doi is the one that immediately comes to mind. I just... don't see him as a troll for trolling's sake. I feel like it's too ingrained in him as a Composer. He's used to hurting people to help them. That's what he does with the Game, and that's what he does in conversation.

He's trying to act to everyone else like nothing's happened, he just can't around Hanekoma. I don't see him taking out his anger on others, which is another reason why it manifests itself so strongly against Hanekoma.

I reference the game script, yes, but it doesn't have all the sound clips of him giggling which I feel is what I need to be adding as well. I really want to just sit down with the game for a while. I have maxed stats, it won't take too long to just run through week 2 and w3d7. I just need to dig out my DS. Really, I am long overdue for a canon review and I've just been pushing it off. Apparently too long.

Again, sorry about that.

[(Anonymous)]

It makes sense. I don't always see him trolling simply for trollings sake. I have seen that done before and it ended poorly, however, I do think it's alright for an occasional "don't feed the troll" kind of post.

Again, it was simply an idea. Neither here nor there.

That's true. Then do that? Though pushing off the canon review is sometimes bad (I've done that), but it makes the game seem all the fresher when you do finally sit down. Makes canon review less like work, I guess?

[neverplaysfair]

I'll be sure to review, anon, once school stops eating me.

And feel free to poke me again within a week if it looks like I'm not fixing things.

[(Anonymous)]

School obviously comes first and if anything still seems off, I'll be sure to let you know.

Again, thank you so much for taking the time to read this and being so receptive to the crit.